Echoes of Wisdom
 
Ten or more ladies went waltzing around; 
with light-hearted laughter; 
-a musical sound! 
Wearing flow'rs on their dresses; 
and wreaths in their hair; 
casting burdens aside; 
never feeling despair.
 
And the heard the sage voices; 
from days long ago; 
in the echoes of wisdom; 
like whispers of gold.

Ten or more ladies went waltzing around; 
such merry, young spirits; 
-oh, look what they found!

Sarah Craft's questions:

It is probably obvious that I have absolutely no formal training in poetry writing... am I doing anything right?

What can I do to improve my technique?

Is this poem too vague or does it make any sense? I mean, I know what I was feeling when I wrote it, but does it evoke any kind of emotional response in the reader?

Is the alliteration o.k.? There's quite a few "w"'s and "l"'s... I wrote this poem when I noticed that most of what I write does not narrarate a story.

This was a beginner's attempt to try and write a poem with narrative quality.

Is the last stanza o.k.? It's shorter and repetive of the beginning? I don't know if I like it or not.