The Altiplano Existence. Untrapped, no trappings, Ride the metalled road As far as she or you should go. Passing through, we wave - why? Because they wave at us With un-self-conscious glee. Brilliant shimmer, falling sun on water, Pans of indigenous gold. Reflection on . . . Other people's lives - distilled. "Where are the oysters I was promised? Am I much longer for this world (If I ever were)?" Regard the menu, sir, as we Who make no claims. Never fail to deliver. Tethered, yet resplendent, imperious Beasts of the altiplano. Masters of the 10-yard circle, They graze and tread, unhurried. The couple at table 3 (if so they be) Shuffle their feet in vain. I write only what I think I see Laid out on the plain in front of me. Anxiety´s fountain Overflows with expectation. As spray rises up, So droplets fall beneath.
Mike Simpson's questions:
1. The poem attempts to bring together two conflicting worlds, the altiplano
and those passing through. Do stanzas 4 or 6 acheve this, or do they appear
to you clumsy and incongruous?
2. I am not sure about the word 'indigenous', stanza 2. I am trying to
suggest the gold only exists for those on the altiplano. Any ideas?
Any other suggestions/ideas/advice gratefully received.
Thanks.