Middle School Medusa Like some shimmering bronze goddess she slips through the air-conditioned lobby of The Sherwood Forest Country Club, dripping wet in a yellow string bikini, past the black marble fountain and the plink of pennies, past bamboo baskets of ferns, the gaping red mouths of poinsettias, past the pink light of the pinball machines where Puerto Rican men breathe from their cigars, their slurred voices rising like smoke— through the swinging glass doors that lead her outside into the sweaty cursed air, where she drifts like gossip, white ribbons swimming in the brown waves of her hair— past the crinkle of candy wrappers and the hiss of soda cans, the boys in blue speedos who stare at her from the snackbar, their faces blank as stone, past the swollen sun-streaked stomachs floating across the pool, the gaggle of girls who gawk at her from their inner tubes, who imagine themselves squeezed into her tight yellow bikini, their own smooth, tanned legs propped atop the lifeguard's boombox, their own shiny manicured fingers snapping to the new, hip song that none of us knows.
Chris Tusa's questions:
Does the comparison to Medusa add complexity to the poem? Or, does it simply distract the reader?
Does the poem end too abruptly?
IO SPEAKS TO JUPITER ABOUT THE LONELINESS OF HER FATE According to Roman mythology, Io, a river nymph, had the misfortune of being subjected to the lust of Jupiter, who, in an attempt to avoid the rage and jealousy of his wife Juno, transformed Io into a heifer. I would have expected an owl with yellow eyes to haunt the air. Maybe a cheetah crouched against an orange horizon. A crow opening like a black flower in the trees. Instead, I spend my days in this thistle-tangled field sweltering in the sun beneath a red sky twisted with black branches. You cannot imagine the awful buzz of horseflies. The daisies with their rusted mouths. The dull eternity of horses. Their purple tongues licking the air. At night, the eyes of Argus blink in the trees. Black waves of wind roll over me, flooding the field. The air cuts at my throat. And my eyes drown in dust. The only comfort I know comes when I think of Juno swimming through the flames of my voice. The brilliant swell of blues and reds. Nothing left except a black cloud of smoke, a hole in the sky drifting across the horizon like the charred memory of a god.
Chris Tusa's questions:
Is the voice believable?
Is the separation between the fifth and final stanza awkward?